The first two lines were scribbled out yesterday.
The second two just now.
In the hands of a better writer I think the imagery in this would be more effective.
That said, I think I did alright here.
I hope you enjoy.
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A roar reverberates through the dark
Among it a pitter-patter upon the paths
Spaces of light are drowned out by noise
As are summer’s evening sounds



I like it!
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